Friday, April 30, 2010

Can I have you advice?? On a lil Poem please thanks!! =)?

Whats sounds better the second line?


heres how this starts off....





Love is a gamble %26amp; your heart is the dice.


So before you roll, I'd think twice.





Then the second line,





#1) My Delima, is havig to decide between rolling the dice and just hope its worth it?


Or do I put the dice down and walk away never knowing what could of been?








OR





#2) My Delima, I love him, but do I roll the dice and hope its worth it?


Or do I not take that risk never know what could of been?








VOTE #1 OR #2


OR


IF YOU HAVE SOMETHING BETTER PLEASE SHARE THANKS =)Can I have you advice?? On a lil Poem please thanks!! =)?
I like #2Can I have you advice?? On a lil Poem please thanks!! =)?
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By the way, it's DILEMMA...





My dilemma is definitely deciding


Between rolling the dice and by the rules abiding


Do I bet it, hope it's worth it?


Or do I play it safe and leave it?


And with this, let my heart continue with its hiding?





What do you think of that? Not great I know...take it or leave it!!!
I like 1
2, it is better to love n lose than never have been loved at all
oh God!!both are beautiful!! i cant ever come up with such good poetry!! but i think u should make the second line (voting ones) a lil shorter for this awesome tune u no wat i mean.. !st line from no 2 and 2nd line frm no 1 lyk mix em up





Love is a gamble %26amp; your heart is the dice.


So before you roll, I'd think twice.


My Delima, I love him, but do I roll the dice and hope its worth it?


Or do I put the dice down and walk away never knowing what could have been?
Ok, first of all, Delima in my native language is pomegranate. I love that fruit.





Never gamble, it is addictive.


I vote neither, sorry.

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